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a song ;
Number of posts: 6017
Age: 14
Location: eating leftover chinese.
House: Alice House!! We're the SHIZ!
Registration date: 2008-05-13
 |  Subject: Re: Assignment Three  Wed Jun 11, 2008 9:31 pm | |
| lol thanks Madlenkadoll! It was my first time with this kind of poetry, I usually write haikus. Anyway, here's another one from Edward's point of veiw when he leaves during New Moon: (it's one of those stories linked together by couplets.)
I run farther away with every step,
even though my love is deeper than the ocean's depth.
Can't she see this is for her own good?
I only hope that at the end she could.
Another step, my heart is breaking,
There is only one cure to it's constant aching.
But no, I have to go, far, far, away,
Because without me she'll be safe the rest of her days.
I can't look back, because then I'll turn around,
Strait back to that one small town.
The town where the peices of my heart lay,
The place where I left my love to stay.
Keep going, my mind comands,
And I can only hope that she'll understand.
Was that ok?? Feedback please  _________________ I love hope something eats you. |
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Mon Jun 23, 2008 3:17 pm | |
| great job! i think it's really hard to write a story that rhymes but doesn't sound fake and stupid you nailed it! Lenny. _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER!  |
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a song ;
Number of posts: 6017
Age: 14
Location: eating leftover chinese.
House: Alice House!! We're the SHIZ!
Registration date: 2008-05-13
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Thu Jun 26, 2008 3:22 pm | |
| thanks! _________________ I love hope something eats you. |
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Thu Jul 24, 2008 9:26 pm | |
| yeah. hey. you said you wrote haikus, right? i put up an assignment for those...assignment 5. check it out!!! _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER! |
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a song ;
Number of posts: 6017
Age: 14
Location: eating leftover chinese.
House: Alice House!! We're the SHIZ!
Registration date: 2008-05-13
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Thu Jul 24, 2008 10:30 pm | |
| *dashes to assignment 5*
(belated) XD_________________ I love hope something eats you. |
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Tue Aug 26, 2008 9:00 am | |
| *calls after gp* have fun! _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER! |
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a song ;
Number of posts: 6017
Age: 14
Location: eating leftover chinese.
House: Alice House!! We're the SHIZ!
Registration date: 2008-05-13
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Tue Aug 26, 2008 4:02 pm | |
| haha i am having fun  i think i should write another couplet...maybe tomorrow, hmm?_________________ I love hope something eats you. |
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Sun Sep 14, 2008 8:48 pm | |
| hgmmmmmmmm.. _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER! |
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xSilentxSuicidex
Number of posts: 194
Age: 17
House: House of the amazing.. ROSALIE...
Registration date: 2008-09-21
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Mon Sep 22, 2008 9:36 pm | |
| Can you hear me in your head,
hear the excuses i have been fed?
Can you feel me under you skin,
the same place I've always been,
Can you see me following you around,
although you put my body in the ground.
yay! i tried to do assignment two but it wouldn't let me post...  could you check that out for me i would LOVE to catch up... |
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Berry
Number of posts: 58
Age: 15
Location: What is this, a school for ants? How can they learn if they can't even fit in the building?
House: The lovely house of ESME!
Registration date: 2008-10-13
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Mon Oct 13, 2008 8:02 pm | |
| As the rain comes falling down the leaves and sticks all start to drown little ants march one by one in my sugar bowl they have their fun in the car, music turned up high all the cars drive fast, passing by _________________ Proud Member of the Esme House!  |
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ClumsyCat
Number of posts: 1649
Age: 20
Location: Measuring her life in LOVE - waiting to embrace her LOVE!!!!!!!
House: Alice House YAY^^
Registration date: 2007-08-18
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Mon Oct 20, 2008 3:48 pm | |
| When I woke this saturday I decided to go and play. Do you hear my summersong? listen, quiet, I´ll play it along. I know why I always try to impress: In this world is what counts your success. I´m walking through the forest but I´m finding no rest. Music is what the world keeps turning I feel its fire deep in me burning. I dreamed I was a greenskinned witch patching my dress with one tiny stitch. _________________ Proud winner of the MOST LIKE EDWARD and MOST LIKELY TO RUN A BOOKSTORE (together with Alu) awards and also very proud to say that SHANA won the CUTEST TA COUPLE award  ~~~~~~~To Hana-chan, the girl I truly love~~~~~~~ I´m Sho, 50% of ShanaThe opposite of war isn´t peace - it´s creation! (Rent)
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Fri Oct 24, 2008 11:53 am | |
| holy moly! you guys are good! wayyy bnetter than me!@ _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER! |
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stupid_lamb13
Number of posts: 21
Location: *points to the llama*He made me do it!
House: Emmett.Rawr.
Registration date: 2008-11-01
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Sat Nov 01, 2008 11:17 pm | |
| I fly through the trees, completely at ease. Gah. I suck. _________________  Music.For.The.Soul. |
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Bedward
Number of posts: 14
Age: 12
Location: Forks, Washington...I wish.
House: Jasper House
Registration date: 2008-10-26
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Sat Nov 01, 2008 11:20 pm | |
| Jasper Cullen Is so sullen I wonder why? Oh, I'll give it a try Does he have issues? I'll fetch him some tissues Please don't cry Tell me why. I am not a good poet, sorry. I suck. Tell me I do. |
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madlenkadoll
Number of posts: 632
Age: 17
Location: Meeting Dr. Awkward.
House: I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you. *coughcoughalicecoughcough* Hey! Coughing's not telling!!
Registration date: 2008-03-24
| | Subject: Re: Assignment Three Mon Dec 22, 2008 7:03 pm | |
| sorry. xSilentSuicidex i forgot to answer you. so here it goes. Once upon a time, someone came into this forum and decided that Assignment Two had too much "spam" instead of comments. Before I could say anything to the spammers, the topic was locked. So now, the admin refused to unlock it, so nobody can post anything. Maybe I will repost the assignment. I sthat a good answer? _________________ xoxo, Lenny. Come visit the Creative Writing class! Forget Gale! Katniss && Peeta FOREVER! |
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